EMPIRE AT WAR #4: Step in Line!-UPDATED/COMPLETE!

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TWO MONTHS AFTER THE FORMATION OF THE GALACTIC EMPIRE, TENSIONS ARE ONCE AGAIN BREWING...

...ON THE REMOTE PLANET OF NABOO-QUEEN APAILANA HAS GRANTED SHELTER TO SEVERAL FUGITIVE JEDI-WANTED FOR TREASON. NABOO-UNDER THE GUIDANCE OF MOFF FILLEM, HAS NEVER FULLY FOLLOWED THE EMPEROR'S WILL COMPLETELY. SUCH AN INCIDENT WOULD PROVE USEFUL IN BRINGING THE REBELLIOUS PLANET UNDER SEIGE-BRING IT IN LINE...



LORD DARTH VADER HAS PERSONALLY DECICDED TO OVERSEE THE CAMPAIGN AGAINST THE QUEEN OF NABOO-AND HAS REQUESTED USAGE OF THE ILLUSTRIOUS DURING THE CAMPAIGN-MUCH TO THE DISLIKE OF COMMODORE WOLVERTON.
LORD VADER BROUGHT WITH HIM, HIS PERSONAL UNIT OF TROOPERS, THE MEMBERS OF THE 501ST LEGION.





Darth Vader: Captain, take me at once to the operations room



Captain Trazzen: This way my lord.




DOWN ON THE PLANET OF NABOO-QUEEN APAILANA WAS DEEP IN THOUGHT.






Chief of Security Staff Hankiel: Your highness. Moff Fillem to see you.




Moff Fillem: Queen Apialana, your actions have been reported to the Imperial Government. I have assurances that they shall act on this. Hiding fugitives is an offence under security act 5670. You do realise that don't you.
Queen Apailana: I can hardly call helping refugees fleeing torture and murder a crime? Can you Governor?




Moff Fillem: It is not for me to decide your highness. The Emperor has been most unhappy about this little incident. He has sent Lord Vader to carry out an investigation into the matter. He shall be arriving at my headquarters soon enough-I shall see what I can do when the opportunity arises.



BACK ON BOARD THE ILLUSTRIOUS:


Lord Vader: Captain, you shall deploy ARC 170 fighters to stop any fleeing light ships from leaving the sector.
Captain Trazzen: Yes my lord.





Darth Vader: What about larger vessels my lord?




Darth Vader: Isn't that blindly obvious Captain, have this vessel orbiting that planet at all times. Commodore Wolverton shall be accompanying me down to the planet should any large vessels make a bid to escape-we shall contact you.





Darth Vader: I shall lead the attack on the capital. Once we have arrested the Queen-and dealt with Moff Fillem-we shall then deal with the Jedi.





Darth Vader: Commander, prepare the men.
Commander Appo: Yes Lord Vader




Trazzen and Frigit glanced at each other-both unsure of what to make of their new Commander in Chief





TWO DAYS LATER-THE ILLUSTRIOUS HAD DEPLOYED IT'S MAIN FORCES TO SURROUND THE PLANET-LORD VADER AND THE 501ST WERE DISPATCHED TO THE PLANET-WHERE THEY FIRSTLY ARRIVED AT THE IMPERIAL BASE TO BRIEF MOFF FILLEM ON THE PROCEDINGS.








Darth Vader: Governor?
Moff Fillem: Ah, Lord Vader-I presume-welcome to Naboo-as you can see I have been successful in routing out this treachary and-





Darth Vader: The Queen-where is she to be located?
Moff Fillem: Ah-a tricky question Lord Vader-but luckily one that a man of such talents, like myself, I can answer. My expertise in such-
Darth Vader: Where is the Queen?





Moff Fillem: Eh-she will be in the confines of her Palace-my guess would be at the aft. She is aware of your presense and is likely to make a bid for freedom. Her starship has been prepared and ready to go.




Darth Vader: Then we must hurry. Commander Appo, prepare the men for an immediate assault on the Palace grounds.
Commander Appo: Right away sir.





WITHIN THE PALACE GROUNDS-THE FUGITIVE JEDI WERE BEING WARNED ABOUT THE IMPERIAL ATTACK-BY APAILANA HERSELF.



Jedi Aakie Roun: Thank you for the warning your highness.
Apailana: It is the least I can do. My government and my people will never betray the Jedi Order or the Republic. Anything I or my people can do to promote freedom and democracy-we do without hesitating.





Aakie: You have been most kind-the shelter you granted us here on Naboo will help us restore justice to the galaxy. I promise-your heart is of gold your highness and on behalf of the force itself-I thank you.




Apailana: Thank you Master Jedi. It has been an honour serving the force-and the Jedi Order.




IMPERIAL HIGH COMMAND MET FOR A BRIEF PRE-BATTLE MEETINGS



Darth Vader: Commander Appo and the 501st shall concentrate on the main fighters-and target the Queen-I shall go for the Jedi.





Commodore Wolverton: Surely, a better idea would be to create a pincer movement-thus resulting in less loss of life-causing a surrender.
Darth Vader: When your opinion is needed on this matter Commodore, I shall ask for it. But for now, your job is to coordinate the battle between the ground and the ILLUSTRIOUS.




Moff Fillem: Lord Vader-do I get a say in such matters. After all-it was due to my insight and tactical genius that the traitors were discovered anyway-I mean-really?





Darth Vader: It was your incompetence and stupidty that allowed them here in the first place Governor!





Moff Fillem: Ah-Lord Vader-you have no right to speak to an appointed governor of an Imperial sector in such tone!





Darth Vader: Would you move over there Governor?
Moff Fillem: I mean-if it had not been for me-you would not have had the chance to hunt these traitors!






Something told Wolverton that the Moff had stepped over the line with that remark...





...That was proven when Lord Vader ignited his lightsabre!
Moff Fillem: Lord Vader-!
Darth Vader: This is the price for incompetence!








Darth Vader: Commander Appo-commence attack!


MORE TO COME IN THIS CHAPTER LATER-PLEASE KEEP WATCHING....AL PHOTOS ARE IN-I'M JUST OFF TO THE PUB FOR A DRINK NOW!
 
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very cool! but one thing why did appo have that shoulder pad on?
 
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Nihilus_guy said:
very cool! but one thing why did appo have that shoulder pad on?


I wanted to mark him as a commander-to distinguish him from his men
 
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Love this story! Cant wait to get more of it.
 
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AS THE NABOO DEFENCE FORCE WAITED FOR THE IMPENDING BATTLE-COMMANDER APPO OF THE 501ST PREPARED HIS MEN-GIVING THEM THEIR FINAL ORDERS BEFORE THE BATTLE.




501st Trooper: Your helmet sir.
Commander Appo: Right-now blue section shall move from the east as Commodore Wolverton suggested. Okay. Red Section-move from the west.





Commander Appo: We shall surround them and then Lord Vader shall deal with the Jedi.




Up ahead-two Naboo Security Guards waited-tense-prepared for battle...





Which came suddenly-as the Red section of the 501st burts around the corner...




It wasn't long before the guards were trampled down...




The 501st made quick work of the Naboo defence force...












The Naboo defence force found themselves trapped suddenly as the pincer movement took them by surprise...




Commander Appo: Move in-take them from the centre-push them outwards-drive them out!










Surrounding the small defence force, the 501st proved that they were far superior to the volunteer force









Just as the 501st seemed to be crushing the Naboo-the Jedi showed an appearance...not able to watch as these volunteers were murdered in cold blood....










Commander Appo: It'd the Jedi. Contact Lord Vader immediately!





Suddenly the 501st found themselves in trouble...









Suddenly, the Queen herself made an appearance, breaking through to the 501st's commander.





Queen Apailana: Commander-stay where you are!









The Queen and her Captain soon broke their way to Commander Appo and held him at gunpoint...






The Jedi master however was about to encounter a threat of a new kind...




Aakie: A Sith Lord? Don't tell me? You must be this Lord Sidious?
Darth Vader: Wrong! I am Lord Vader-and you are as good as dead.






With Appo at gunpoint, the Queen started to make demands-such as a back down of the 501st. Appo denied-he knew backup was just around the corner. He had nothing to fear




Within an instant, the young Queen was hit-a blaster to the back...




Her Captain yelled in anger and frustration...and Commander Appo took the advantage!






Seizing the weapon, Appo once again had to upper hand against this traitor.





On the other side of the plaza, the Jedi and the Sith battled...


Aakie: So...you are Darth Sidious's apprentice are you not?
Darth Vader: Evidently so.




Aakie: Is Sidious in league with Emperor Palpatine?
Darth Vader: Lord Sidious is Emperor Palpatine!


That statement took Aakie completely by surprize, so much so, he laxed and Vader took the upper hand in the battle






Darth Vader: And like the rest of the Jedi-you were doomed to lose the war-yout treachary and deceit, could never destroy the power of the dark side.






Aakie: And Sidious-he-he issued Order 66?!
Darth Vader: That is correct Master Jedi.




Aakie: And this Sidious, he turned you into his executioner? This warped twisted being?
Darth Vader: Sidious has no power over me! I did this to myself!




Aakie: You fight like a Jedi-is that-
Darth Vader: Surely you can see-I was once a Jedi-for a while.





Aakie: One of the lost twenty! Like Dooku then-a fraud-not a real Sith Lord!
Darth Vader: I am the twenty-first!





Aakie: What?
Darth Vader: Have you not heard of Anakin Skywalker?
Aakie: What the-





WITH THAT DARTH VADER PUT AN END TO THE TRAITORS LIFE...THE MISSION WAS COMPLETE-THE TRAITORS HAD BEEN DEALT WITH-AND NABOO WAS BACK IN LINE WITH THE IMPERIAL GOVERNMENT...
 
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do clones know how to do that???
 
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that was very cool!
i liked the battle between vader and that jedi
GREAT work
 
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spyboy92 said:
martial arts.



Ah-yes Commander Appo-he's quite a talented one you know


Don't underestimate the power of a clone!
 
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Re: EMPIRE AT WAR #4: Step in Line!

Nice work again, and cool storyline and loved the action shots.

I have no idea how you pump these out so fast.

 
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Awesome and nice action shots. The effects are getting a little better but can still use some work.

I just remembered how silly that "dirt" on the 501st troopers make them look especially in a squad. Why oh why Hasbro.

Oh and I'm with CHEWIE, how do you get these up so fast.
 
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Well done, DOFINE!

POSITIVES: I really liked this chapter, if only because of Lord Vader. Some of his dialogue was perfect, although a few times he said a little too much. but for the most part, you nailed it. Great photography yet again. Great shots of the battle b/w Vader and the fugitive Jedi. I didn't like the dialogue in the beginning, but outstanding work with the dialogue at the end of the duel. I love the host of the Jedi being overwhelmed by Vader's admission of being Anakin. Perfect!

CRITIQUES: Some of my comments here have been mentioned before. If you can perfect the effects, you really would have some great pics. But they are improving. Why did Vader have to ask the Moff to "move over here?" He would have just choked them right there on the spot or cut him down with the saber. The narration need to be cleaned up, b/c it distracts from the story as is.

Excellent outdoor shots. Very good story and nice to see some of the BF2 story brought to life here.

Onto chapter 5...
 
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