DARK ILLUSIONS Photonovel - Completed

Joined
Jun 7, 2005
Messages
4,573
Reaction score
0
DARK ILLUSIONS

A Clone Wars story




As the Republic is ravaged by the Clone Wars, the Jedi and Grand Clone Army of the Republic continue their search for Count Dooku and General Grievous.

The Jedi act as Generals on the field of battle, instructing the Clones and advanced engineered Commanders. However, as like the atmosphere in the Republic Senate, fear & distrust race across the galaxy.

As the Clone Wars continue to drag on, a victory followed by a defeat every week, the Republic continues to strive for peace while maintaing hope for a return to the peaceful times that lasted for over a 1,000 years.
 
Joined
Jun 7, 2005
Messages
4,573
Reaction score
0
Re: DARK ILLUSIONS - Photonovel

DARK ILLUSIONS

ACT I

Chapter 1


On the distant planet of Raxus Prime…


Alpha: This is the last one, sir.
Cmdr. Bacara: Any sign of activity here?



Alpha: Just one security droid, sir. One more than the last barracks yesterday.



Cmdr. Bacara: This one is not worth our time. Call in the Kimcharise to bomb the facility.
Alpha: Yes, sir.



Ki-Adi Mundi: Not so fast, Commander. Cancel the order for the gunship.



Ki-Adi: I want to verify that Grievous is not on this planet. This is the last of the strongholds. If we destroy the General, I want physical proof he is dead. Have your Marines secure the barracks.
Cmdr. Bacara: As you wish…



Cmdr. Bacara: I want one squad to circle around the barracks! The other with me! Leave nothing standing! Move out!!



Ki-Adi: Be cautious, Commander. I have a bad feeling about this. May the Force be with you.



Cmdr. Bacara: If Grievous is inside, then this war will end here and now.



Alpha: The security droid has dropped to the ground, sir.



Cmdr. Bacara: Take him down quickly, trooper.
Alpha: Yes, sir.



BLAST!



Cmdr. Bacara: Now, circle right and activate your electronic visor. Beta Team: Report!



Beta: We have reached the back of the barracks. No sign of ………wait…….I hear……



Beta: Destroyer droids!!! Cover! Cover!



BLAST! BALST! BLAST! BLAST! BLAST!
Beta: Too late!!! Aaarrggghhhh…..



Cmdr. Bacara: Beta Team is down.
Alpha: Sir, the barracks are opening…..



Alpha: Droids!!!



Cmdr. Bacara: You know what to do, troopers!



BLAST! BLAST! BLAST!



Cmdr. Bacara: FIRE!!!



Continued below...
 
Joined
Jun 7, 2005
Messages
4,573
Reaction score
0
Re: DARK ILLUSIONS - Photonovel

Thud! Thud!



Alpha: The destroyer droids!



Cmdr. Bacara: General Mundi will dispose of them.....not soon enough...


















Ki-Adi: Sweep the barracks, Commander. Grievous must be inside.



Alpha: Another droid coming…



Cmdr. Bacara: This one’s mine!



Cmdr. Bacara: Check the rest of the barracks.



Alpha: Nothing, sir. Only a few droid parts.



Gamma: The same on this side, sir. Nothing but screws and bolts.



Alpha: I’ll check the roof.



Alpha: Commander! I found…..something….



Cmdr. Bacara: Report! What do you see?!



Alpha: I see…..Grievous’….



Clunk!



Cmdr. Bacara: Magna Guards!!! Spread out!!!



Continued below...
 
Joined
Jun 7, 2005
Messages
4,573
Reaction score
0
Re: DARK ILLUSIONS - Photonovel

Cmdr. Bacara: Stay away from the staffs!



Gamma: Aaaaahhh!!!



Cmdr. Bacara (thinking): Rifle is worthless in close combat…



Cmdr. Bacara: Last chance…..



Cmdr. Bacara (thinking): Just a little closer….



Cmdr. Bacara: Now!! AAAHHH!!!



Ki-Adi: Grievous must be close!



Ki-Adi: But, first to dispose of his “companions.”














Ki-Adi: I’ll take that!



Ki-Adi: You have failed your General!



Ki-Adi: Commander!! CATCH!!!



Cmdr. Bacara: Got it!



Cmdr. Bacara: Now, this makes things even…












Continued below...
 
Joined
Jun 7, 2005
Messages
4,573
Reaction score
0
Re: DARK ILLUSIONS - Photonovel




Cmdr. Bacara: Where is General Grievous?! TELL ME!!!



Cmdr. Bacara: I will give you one more opportunity to answer my question: WHERE IS GENERAL GRIEVOUS?!



Cmdr. Bacara: Stop wasting my time!



Cmdr. Bacara: Mission accomplished…



Ki-Adi: Good work, Commander. Your training has served you well.



Delta: Reinforcements have arrived, Commander.
Cmdr. Bacara: Reinforcements? I did not call for…..




Ki-Adi: I called for reinforcements, Commander. Wasn’t sure if your Marines were going to be enough to take down Grievous.



Cmdr. Bacara: My men can handle anything thrown at them.
Ki-Adi: I can see that now. Nevertheless, this adventure proved worthless. Grievous is not here. He only left these droids as a distraction.



Ki-Adi: Pick up the wounded, and bury the dead, Commander. I will report our result to the Council.



Cmdr. Bacara: Do as the General says, trooper.
Delta: Yes, sir!



Cmdr. Bacara: And trooper…….call for the Kimcharise to destroy this place. I want nothing left standing.
Delta: Yes, sir.



Cmdr. Bacara: Should have done that from the beginning…






Continued below...
 
Joined
Sep 1, 2005
Messages
4,586
Reaction score
186
Location
New York
Re: DARK ILLUSIONS - Photonovel

Great, I liked how you decided to do another story and a great decision it was. This looks like it will be better than Vaders Quest.
 
Joined
Jun 7, 2005
Messages
4,573
Reaction score
0
Re: DARK ILLUSIONS - Photonovel

Chapter 2


Back on Coruscant, the Jedi Council have just viewed Ki-Adi Mundi’s report on Raxus Prime.


Shaak Ti: That is the end of Master Mundi’s transmission.



Mace Windu: Ki-Adi’s frustration was obvious. Again Grievous proves to be one step ahead of us. He was reported on Raxus Prime only three days ago.



Yoda: Knew of our attack, Grievous did. Strange this is…



Obi-Wan Kenobi: Palpatine will not be pleased, since he was against sending what few Clones we had to hunt down Grievous.



Mace Windu: Palpatine’s attention is spread over too many objectives. He wants to end the war, but also secure the Inner Core.
Saesee Tiin: His current legislation to allow Clones to become Coruscant’s Galactic Security is only adding to his distractions.



Kit Fisto: We must not allow him to lose focus on capturing Count Dooku or Grievous. The war will end if they are destroyed.



Mace Windu: Here he comes now, late as usual…





Chancellor Palpatine: Please excuse my tardiness. As you know, several Senators are opposed to my plan for the Galactic Security of Coruscant. Their inquiries only delay the inevitable.



Mace Windu: Think nothing of it, Chancellor. We were just discussing the latest report from Master Mundi. His latest assignment proved unsuccessful in locating Grievous.



Chancellor Palpatine: Another disappointment. Was your intelligence not correct, then?



Yoda: Knew of our plans to attack, the General did. Now, the search continues…



Obi-Wan Kenobi: Our intelligence was correct about Grievous’ location, since he left several Magna Guards behind.



Shaak Ti: We have several more Jedi looking for him and Count Dooku. It will only be a matter of time before we find both of them.



Chancellor Palpatine: And if you don’t? I am sorry to sound so negative, but in our continued hunts for the Count and his General, we have found nothing but dust.



Chancellor Palpatine: Could they not just be leading us on a wild Bantha chase? Meanwhile, with our Clones being re-positioned, the Seperatists come closer to taking back several planets in the Inner Core.



Chancellor Palpatine: With this ongoing conflict, the people of these planets may begin to believe the rhetoric from the Seperatists, that we cannot protect them. This may lead to these crucial planets leaving the Republic, and joining the Seperatists.



Chancellor Palpatine: Peace is our objective, not just the death of two evil beings. I understand how important Dooku & Grievous are to ending the War. However, the Senate is not pleased when we lose troops on missions that prove worthless. I will shoulder the blame for this myself, but the Jedi no longer enjoy their high stature with the Senate or the Republic. There are trying times, for certain.



Chancellor Palpatine: Now, unfortunately, I am needed in an emergency session of the Senate. Several Senators have called for a vote on the Galactic Security measure. I am confident we have the votes to win, though. I bid you a good day, Jedi.



Mace Windu: His time spent with us becomes less and less each time.



Saesee Tiin: He is correct about our failed missions. Each one brings less hope to the War ending soon.



Obi-Wan Kenobi: There are so few Jedi left that I fear we may not have enough to find either Dooku or Grievous.



Yoda: No matter, the pursuit of Grievous and Dooku will continue. Growing the dark side is, difficult to see the future is. May the Force be with us.



Mace Windu: Obi-Wan, may we speak to you.
Obi-Wan Kenobi: Of course, Master.



Mace Windu: Where is Anakin?
Obi-Wan Kenobi: He is in the meditation room in the Temple. He has been very uneasy about something as of late.



Mace Windu: You must keep him focused, Obi-Wan. He is quickly frustrated with this War.



Obi-Wan Kenobi: I will, Master. I am concerned he has been on Coruscant for too long. He becomes restless with the War going on.



Kit Fisto: His conversations with the Chancellor may also add to that anxiety.



Mace Windu: It is Palpatine I worry about. His recent actions are questionable.



Mace Windu: Just watch him carefully, Obi-Wan. His skills will be needed when we find Dooku or Grievous.
Obi-Wan Kenobi: I will, Master. And thank you for your concern.



Obi-Wan Kenobi: …..



Continued below...
 
Joined
Jun 7, 2005
Messages
4,573
Reaction score
0
Re: DARK ILLUSIONS - Photonovel

Chapter 3


In the Meditation Room at the Jedi Temple, a calm Anakin allows himself to listen to the Force…





Anakin Skywalker: There is something not right…



Qui-Gon Jinn: Anakin Skywalker, meet Master Adi Gallia. She is a dear friend of mine, and the person I confide in regarding the Jedi Council.
Adi Gallia: It is a pleasure to meet you, Anakin Skywalker.



Anakin Skywalker: ……



Anakin Skywalker: But how am I supposed to know the difference between the Living Force and the visions?
Adi Gallia: The Living Force will only be here and now. The visions you have are not from the Living Force, Anakin.



Adi Gallia: Qui-Gon explained this to me so many times. Only recently, have I understood what he was talking about.



Adi Gallia: Because Qui-Gon only made decisions based on the present situation, the Council did not believe he thought about the consequences of his actions. This was their main riff with Qui-Gon.
Anakin Skywalker: I understand, Master. But how did you become so close to him?



Adi Gallia: Mainly because he was right about a lot of things. He knew of the Dark Side growing before his attacker appeared on Tatooine.



Adi Gallia: He knew the Republic was being corrupted. This war would not have surprised him, nor the allegation by Dooku that the Senate is controlled by a Sith Lord.



Adi Gallia: It was here in the Meditation Room where I first began to understand the Living Force. I come here to meditate on these matters. In time, you will come here to quiet your mind.



Adi Gallia: Based on your accomplishments, Qui-Gon would have been very proud of you. You have made the entire Jedi Order proud.
Anakin Skywalker: Thank you, Master.



Anakin Skywalker: …..






Anakin Skywalker: Master Gallia!!!



Anakin Skywalker: Grievous….



To be continued...
 
Joined
Aug 23, 2001
Messages
15,665
Reaction score
30
Location
www.yakface.com
Re: DARK ILLUSIONS - Photonovel

This is pretty long, so I haven't had a chance to read it just yet - but the pics of Palpatine's office are simply awesome... what did you use for all the mini-platforms?

 
Joined
Feb 27, 2005
Messages
354
Reaction score
0
Re: DARK ILLUSIONS - Photonovel

The part with Palpatine was very, very well done. I like the hand motions you had for him.

But my favorite is Anakin and Adi, and how they are done in a flashback.

This is very well done.

Bravo!

I love that you have Anakin meditating as well
 
Joined
Apr 1, 2002
Messages
96
Reaction score
0
Re: DARK ILLUSIONS - Photonovel

Very very cool. I've said it before but I'll say it again, to be able to do what you do without altering the pictures is awesome. It is a true skill to be able to light and photograph good pictures.

What I really like about the story is you just jump right into the thick of things. No long exposition in the beginning, just jump right in, just like the movies. That flashback for Anakin was intriguing. We never did get to visually see his training so it was a nice touch.

Great job. I look forward to seeing more!
 
Joined
Jun 9, 2005
Messages
220
Reaction score
0
Re: DARK ILLUSIONS - Photonovel

Again, you must be commended on your photonovel. You have managed to tell a tale of excitement and intrigue and have me clamoring for more! Can't wait until the next chapter. Keep 'em coming on a weekly basis!


Viva La KimCharise--the ultimate Gunship!
 
Joined
Aug 23, 2004
Messages
18,085
Reaction score
2
Location
Gotham City
Re: DARK ILLUSIONS - Photonovel

Good job. The best parts:
You told an action packed story with no photo effects
You used awesome flashbacks
You had effective dioramas
You made an unarticulated figure like Bacara look awesome
You got the lighting wonderful

My only comment is use more clones. I can tell you used the same two Tank Gunners for all of the pics.
 
Joined
Jun 13, 2005
Messages
2,966
Reaction score
0
Re: DARK ILLUSIONS - Photonovel

That was just, WOW! I'm happy you're up and making stories!
 
Joined
Aug 23, 2001
Messages
15,665
Reaction score
30
Location
www.yakface.com
Re: DARK ILLUSIONS - Photonovel

Great job SA, I'll focus on the positive which was most of it in my opinion. I think this is better than Vader's quest. I think that posting so much at once was a good idea and makes it easier for me to follow, as this could have easily been divided into several chapters and posted a few days apart.

One suggestion, and it's not about making customs. I would suggest some more establishing shots, like maybe a view of Coruscant or a panoramic view of where Ki Adi Mundi was. Just to reinforce the different locations and establish them a little more.

 
Joined
Jan 28, 2005
Messages
4,325
Reaction score
218
Location
Boston
Re: DARK ILLUSIONS - Photonovel

Sooo glad you are back Longhorn. These are truly the best stories on the boards. They look fantastic!
 
Joined
May 4, 2005
Messages
53
Reaction score
0
Re: DARK ILLUSIONS - Photonovel

wow, really really good. great story, great photos and characters. I always wondered why no one uses Grievious. great job man. keep up the good work.
 
Joined
Apr 20, 2005
Messages
2,034
Reaction score
0
Re: DARK ILLUSIONS - Photonovel

Your back! And now I understand your prolonged absence. It was well worth the wait. Your skill with a camera is unsurpassed on these boards. Great story! Wonderful pacing. Kudos all around. I look forward to the next installment.

PS Want to send me a few of those robes? They looked great!
 
Joined
Aug 23, 2001
Messages
15,665
Reaction score
30
Location
www.yakface.com
Re: DARK ILLUSIONS - Photonovel

strikeg said:
wow, really really good. great story, great photos and characters. I always wondered why no one uses Grievious. great job man. keep up the good work.
I've only used Grievous twice I think in photonovels, and both times it was just a cameo... I'm sure SA will include him more in the future though, I know I'm going to have more on him. I just like making all new characters which is why I haven't used him much because we already know what happens with the established characters for the most part, but the established characters are a lot of fun too, especially probably on a character like Grievous where there is a lot that could be added in for the Clone Wars through our own imaginations.

 
Joined
Mar 25, 2004
Messages
4,112
Reaction score
168
Re: DARK ILLUSIONS - Photonovel

Great to have you back where you belong, Longhorn!!

Love the new story and I especially like the "dark" lighting effects - very atmospheric!

I will try to post more after I re-read the story. But, hats off to you for another job well-done!
 
Joined
Jan 18, 2004
Messages
4,653
Reaction score
0
Re: DARK ILLUSIONS - Photonovel

well it's definitely better than your previous story, you should listen to chewie about introduction shots
 
Joined
Jun 13, 2005
Messages
2,966
Reaction score
0
Error!

I found an error in your story. In one of the flashbacks, there's a pic that is suppose to be after geonosis (based on the discussion), and Anakin does not have a robotic hand.





EDIT: added pic
 
Joined
Dec 2, 2004
Messages
4,900
Reaction score
0
Re: Error!

Great story. A nice mix of action and plot progression. The photo set-ups are good too. There is a lot of motion in your compositions.
 
Joined
Nov 2, 2004
Messages
486
Reaction score
0
Re: Error!

Grreat Story my friend, I was reading the whole thing and enjoyed it a lot.
 
Joined
Jun 7, 2005
Messages
4,573
Reaction score
0
Re: DARK ILLUSIONS replies

Thanx for all the compliments and comments, guys and Gals. Glad everyone found something to their liking. Tried to showcase a lot of different locations. I am still looking everywhere around the house for more props.....

REDD - Good eye, perhaps you should "proof read" my work in the future! However, in my defense, if George Lucas and ILM will leave Hayden's real right hand exposed when he lands on Mustafar in the ROTS DVD, then I will leave my fig alone!

(runs to other room.....changing "real" hand to "gloved" hand....)

Look for an update by Wednesday, if not sooner!

 
Joined
Dec 2, 2004
Messages
4,900
Reaction score
0
Re: DARK ILLUSIONS replies

You'll just have to digitally fix it for the special edition.
 
Joined
Mar 19, 2005
Messages
1,272
Reaction score
0
Re: DARK ILLUSIONS replies

MORE! MORE!
Man I love photo novels. What a way to "fill some gaps". Yur very own "infintes" or "visionaries".
 
Joined
Jun 13, 2005
Messages
2,966
Reaction score
0
Re: DARK ILLUSIONS replies

You could have some tech wiz fix it for you! Or, just retake the pics. Or you can forget about it and not change it. Like ILM did.
 
Joined
Jun 7, 2005
Messages
4,573
Reaction score
0
Re: DARK ILLUSIONS Chapter 4 thru 6

DARK ILLUSIONS

Chapter 4



In the Jedi Temple, Anakin Skywalker waits for Jedi Master Obi-Wan Kenobi.



Anakin Skywalker: …..








Obi-Wan Kenobi: Anakin, I came as soon as I got your message. What’s wrong?




Anakin Skywalker: Master Gallia is in trouble.
Obi-Wan Kenobi: How do you know?




Anakin Skywalker: I saw Grievous during my meditation. He is stalking her.




Obi-Wan Kenobi: Master Gallia is on a Peace Recovery mission on Adaven. As for Grievous, his location is still unknown.




Anakin Skywalker: Grievous knows where she is…..




Anakin Skywalker: He knows she is vulnerable.




Anakin Skywalker: The Council must send a squad to rescue her. I will go alone if I have to…




Obi-Wan Kenobi: Calm down, Anakin. We don’t have any evidence that Master Gallia is in trouble or even if Grievous is anywhere near Adaven.
Anakin Skywalker: I don’t need “evidence.” I KNOW she is in trouble!




Obi-Wan Kenobi: There’s no reasoning with you. We will speak to Master Windu regarding this. Now, relax.
Anakin Skywalker: Forgive me, Master. I just have a bad feeling about this whole thing.




Obi-Wan Kenobi: Well, I am glad you told me about this first. I’m surprised you didn’t go to Adaven by yourself.
Anakin Skywalker: I wouldn’t go without you, Master. Who would save you while I was gone?



Continued below
 
Joined
Jun 7, 2005
Messages
4,573
Reaction score
0
Re: DARK ILLUSIONS Chapter 4 thru 6

DARK ILLUSIONS

Chapter 5




Later, Count Dooku arrives for a private meeting at The Works, the abandoned manufacturing district on Coruscant.







Darth Sidious: Welcome, Lord Tyrannus.
Darth Tyrannus: Lord Sidious, the War goes well.




Darth Tyrannus: The Grand Army of the Republic is spread across the galaxy. Their supply lines are stretched beyond the breaking point. The Jedi ranks are thinned out, and more systems are rallying to join the Separatist movement.
Darth Sidious: You’ve done well, Tyrannus.




Darth Sidious: The Jedi are obsessed in their search for Grievous and you. Their pathetic dedication will play into our hands.
Darth Tyrannus: Shall we begin the final assault, Master?




Darth Sidious: The final stages of the War have already begun. The Republic is helpless to stop it.
Darth Tyrannus: What plans do you have for Master Kenobi & Skywalker?




Darth Sidious: They’re of no concern. Their destiny lye with me.
Darth Tyrannus: General Grievous was anxious to begin his next attack. He is in position now.




Darth Sidious: Good. Then, the time has come for your own attack to begin, Lord Tyrannus.
Darth Tyrannus: Your wish is my command, Master.






Meanwhile, back at the Jedi Temple, the Jedi discuss the latest developments in the Clone War.



Aayla Secura: …the report is from Clone Intelligence. It's the best lead we've had. That system is supposed to be void of any Separatists.




Kit Fisto: We must act quickly. If we delay a response, Grievous could escape again. The Council must decide which squad will go.
Aayla Secura: What about Palpatine?




Mace Windu: Let’s be cautious. If we have another failed mission, even Palpatine will not be able to take full responsibility. We need proof, not leads. We’ll speak about this at a later time.




Obi-Wan Kenobi: Master Windu, may we speak to you for a moment?
Mace Windu: Of course.




Obi-Wan Kenobi: Anakin has had some…..visions…..regarding General Grievous.




Anakin Skywalker: Actually, of Master Gallia.




Mace Windu: Master Gallia is surveying Adaven. The war is over there, and her squad is to assist in the rebuilding. Reports have General Grievous on the other side of the galaxy.




Anakin Skywalker: Allow me to go to Adaven to verify she is safe.
Mace Windu: Your place is here, Skywalker. I sense much confusion in you. We have more leads than we can possibly follow-up. We can’t afford to send additional forces to a planet with no effect on the War, based solely on your “visions.”




Obi-Wan Kenobi: But Master, with Grievous’ location still in question, should we not at least verify Master Gallia is safe on Adaven?




Mace Windu: While I don’t think this warrants any more of our time…..I will send a transmission to Adi. At least we will receive her estimate regarding how long the rebuilding effort will take.




Anakin Skywalker: Thank you, Master. I look forward to her response.
Obi-Wan Kenobi: Thank you, Master Windu.
Mace Windu: May the Force be with you both.




Anakin Skywalker: He doesn’t believe me, Obi-Wan. I am not confused! Perhaps if the visions were his own, he would take this more seriously…..




Obi-Wan Kenobi: Calm yourself, Anakin. We are all on the same side here. He did say he would contact Master Gallia. I'm sure everything will be alright.




Obi-Wan Kenobi: Now, come on, let’s go to the briefing. I am interested to know how the War is going.
Anakin Skywalker: Yes, Master. I hope you're right.
 
Joined
Jun 7, 2005
Messages
4,573
Reaction score
0
Re: DARK ILLUSIONS Chapter 4 thru 6

DARK ILLUSIONS

Chapter 6




Originally a Separatist stronghold, Jedi Council member Adi Gallia & Commander Deviss arrive on Adaven to begin the rebuilding effort.



Adi Gallia: This should be close enough, Commander.





Commander Deviss: Yes, General. The base is just over the hill, north of here.





Adi Gallia: Prepare your men, Commander. We will see some disturbing things that could rattle the rookies.
Commander Deviss: Yes, General. Will we encounter any resistance?





Adi Gallia: No. The last reports of the War indicated the Republic succeeded in driving the Droid Armies out of the Adaven system, but only after the “MAYDAY” call from the original battlion.
Commander Deviss: Is this what you meant by “disturbing?”





Adi Gallia: Yes, Commander………this is what I meant…………..





Adi Gallia: Every life is precious to the freedom of the Republic.
Commander Deviss: We will fight for as long as necessary, General.





Commander Deviss: This must be the remains of the droids that killed the two troopers.





Commander Deviss: Four droids versus two Clone troopers. Our brothers-in-arms did us proud!
Adi Gallia: …..





Adi Gallia: Keep moving. We need to reach the base and see if anyone survived this carnage.





Commander Deviss: More droids, General. The Seppes knew this was the base of the Adaven system.





Adi Gallia: Unfortunately, we did not have enough troops for the initial attack.





Commander Deviss: Be proud, General. This solider destroyed four more droids.





Commander Deviss: According to the map, the base is hidden behind the brush. Remove those leaves, troopers!





Adi Gallia: We’re too late…..















Commander Deviss: Even more droids, General.
Adi Gallia: They were trapped…










Commander Deviss: They did their job, General.
Adi Gallia: Nevertheless, this is proof of Grievous’ brutality. We have to end this War soon.





Commander Deviss: Pilot, you were to remain with the ship.
Omega: Sorry, sir! We’ve received a transmission from Coruscant.





Omega: The transmission is for you, General Gallia. From Master Windu.
Adi Gallia: Master Windu?





Adi Gallia: Let’s go, trooper. Commander Deviss, begin the cleanup process.
Commander Deviss: Yes, General.





Commander Deviss: Troopers! Begin collecting the bodies for burial.





Commander Deviss: We will give all of our fallen brothers the proper burial, with full honors.










Adi Gallia: I wonder why Master Windu would contact me here.
Omega: I don’t know, General, but the message was marked “URGENT.”








To be continued...
 
Joined
Aug 8, 2005
Messages
900
Reaction score
0
Re: DARK ILLUSIONS Chapter 4 thru 6

WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW! These new chapters are great
! I love how the story is developing, the pictures are all incredible, and the cliffhanger at the end really makes me want to see the next chapters. Great job
, can't wait to see more.
 
Joined
May 4, 2005
Messages
53
Reaction score
0
Re: DARK ILLUSIONS Chapter 4 thru 6

more more more! digging the troopers walking through the hills with rock s scenes. Very cool.
 
Joined
Mar 25, 2004
Messages
4,112
Reaction score
168
Re: DARK ILLUSIONS Chapter 4 thru 6

This is not meant as a back-handed compliment:

I enjoyed "Vader's Quest", but I'm lovin' the hell out of this!!!

Really great story! Your dialogue is excellent, very much in character. And the story is intriguing! Love the ending, you've really got me on the edge of my seat, waiting for more!!

Bravo! Extremely well done!
 
Joined
Sep 1, 2005
Messages
4,586
Reaction score
186
Location
New York
Re: DARK ILLUSIONS Chapter 4 thru 6

This is great I loved it I was at the end of my seat in that last chapter. I can already see what is going to happen in the next couple of chapters but I can't wait to see how you make it. Again excellent job your very skilled at this.
 
Top